The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether raising the cost of fossil fuel can find an optimal solution to the serious environmental issues we are currently facing globally. From my viewpoint, I would not consider myself an advocate of
this
notion. I believe that there are more effective approaches we can utilize to deal with
the global surroundings problems
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. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the expanse of conventional energy sources is not an ideal solution to fight against
this
dire issue. People have an inelastic demand for oil, which means that even if the money needed to be used to buy it hikes up, citizens will still need to purchase it no matter what.
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, in Viet
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, even though the government has recently made oil prices even higher, individuals still have to buy it as they need it to
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their basic needs.
Hence
, making the money needed for buying traditional sources of energy even higher is not an appropriate tactic to protect the environment. While
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ineffective impact of the increase in the non-renewable power’s price is widely acknowledged, there are myriads of possible solutions we can use to improve the situation of the alarmingly polluted environment
such
as utilizing electric vehicles. Since they can both solve the basic demands and run on electricity which is not harmful to the air quality, these can be used as effective means to overcome
this
grave issue.
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, Vinfast, which is a well-known
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make
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in Viet Nam, has released a wealth of automobiles that run on electricity.
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not only contribute to
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ensure that the air quality is good but
also
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the
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needs of everyone in
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society.
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that are powered by electricity should be put into use to deal with international pollution. In conclusion, overcoming the negative contamination of the surroundings does not attribute to the rise in oil prices as there are a large number of other options we can optimize to cope with it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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