Self-Confidence is the most important factor for success in school or at work. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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major factor for
successfulness
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in school or at
work
. Mainly I
agree
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this
fact because I assume it is really true, more and more
people
believe the opinion. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, some
people
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this
fact because they assume
people
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self-
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. They think
people
must hard
work
and hard study so they will achieve their
aim
and success. More and more
people
do not believe
themselves
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in themselves
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therefore
they do not achieve their
aim
. Nowadays
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of
people
do not
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and study
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they do not self-
confidence
. If
people
believe
their
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ability
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that everything will be fine.
On the other hand
, I assume everything will be smart with
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self-
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confidence
. But everybody must believe
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abilities so they achieve easy everything.
Self-
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confidence
is really significant
our
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aim
. There are lots of advantages
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self-
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confidence
, they are really
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alternatives
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.
For
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firstly
number
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a number
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of
people
and
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young
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believe
themselves
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in themselves
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and their
aim
,
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they achieve their success. In conclusion ,
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is the most major factor for
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in school and
work
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