Some people do not like changes and prefer to do things they are good at, while other people like taking risks and trying new things. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
opine that
change
is not always a better option, they live their
life
without changing themselves. Whereas, other individuals are eager to do different things in
life
.
This
disquisition will discuss both
the
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views and I will include my perspective in the conclusion. To commence with,
people
just do things in which they are better, these
people
do not
change
their routine and live old school
life
.
In addition
,
people
who do not
change
much always
finds
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difficulty in fulfilling the basic needs of
modern
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world like smartphone,
car
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,
however
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they just live in their comfort zone.
Additionally
, those who prefer not to
change
are scared of changes and
its
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outcomes and start worrying about
future
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and end up being depressed. To add to it, some believe that if they
change
themselves, it will impact
on
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their personality development.
People
make some rules which they think should not be broken.
In addition
, they believe that, if they break rules
then
it would affect their lives.
At
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the end, they live
boring
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life
and do not
change
themselves much.
On the other hand
, in
this
fast world,
people
love to
change
,
they
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are going with the trend. They believe that if they do not
change
,
then
they will not be able to survive in
this
modernized and fast world.
Furthermore
, some take risks and always try different things which
make
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them successful. They believe that
,
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taking risks does not mean succeeding every time, it can lead to failure which in turn can help you grow as a person. In conclusion, in my opinion, to survive in
this
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fast paced
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life
,
change
is needed, individuals have to take risks and gain experience and knowledge as
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as they can.
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