Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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some
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think that higher
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is required to achieve a successful career.
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way to get a
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after completing
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paragraphs. To being with, there are some reasons for studying at university or college is
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successful
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career. The
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teach
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the basic
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level of subjects. While
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in the college and university teach
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the advanced
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level of
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particular
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students
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knowledge
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of their field.
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, if students get
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a job
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after
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they do not have enough
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as, how to deal with other
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and how to convince
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them about
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their products or anything else. Whereas
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the student
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job
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a job
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after
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their degree
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,they have
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in every field.
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, nowadays
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competition
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competition
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increased so students have
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skills or
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companies do not pay higher.
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, the student who
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after
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some problem when companies give promotion because they do not have any idea to
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and deal with
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, the survey
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times
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number of children
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job
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jobs
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after
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but they can not apply for higher studies in college and university. As a
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, in the near future
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have not good education in our country. In conclusion, the
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important part of our life when
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believe that if children
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future
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futures
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and good
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opportunities
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they have
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enough education and
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a vaild
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vaild
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valid
degree. While, others think
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study
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the study
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is not useful for
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job
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so,
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they
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after
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.
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, my opinion of the former point of view because education is too important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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