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In some countries, Criminal trials are shown on television for the public.Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Throughout most of human history, criminal
trials
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 have been a public event, that anyone could attend.
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 in the present world, most countries have private criminal
trials
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 only, there are still some countries, that make them public, and even show them on
television
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. The advantages and disadvantages will be thoroughly analysed and discussed in
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 essay before drawing a conclusion.
Firstly
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, there are multiple disadvantages to showing criminal
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 on
television
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 for the public. The most prominent one is that there are a lot of unregulated children who may stumble upon a trial accidentally, exposing them to content which can be really inappropriate for their age. Another issue with criminal
trials
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 being shown on
television
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 is that these programs will attract attention to ongoing criminal cases, which will inevitably lead to a tiny part of the general population interfering with the case.
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, there are several advantages to showing criminal
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 on
television
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. It helps to maintain public order, by showing the consequences of breaking the law directly to the population. Having the general population see the faces, and the bodies of potential criminals can assist in gathering witnesses for
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,
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 helping public safety. In ,conclusion both sides of showing criminal
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 on
television
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 for the general public, have strong support,
however
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 after analysis of both, sides the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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 we should show criminal
trials
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 on
television
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.

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