Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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as maternity. there is an idea that women are solely responsible for making a decision about having a

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or not,

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she is responsible for

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. I am completely disagreeing with

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idea. I believe that

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and

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are responsible for involving in

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decision making

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process of having a

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or not. Because

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of them will have their own duties in the breeding process.

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, parents should precisely consider the challenges which they may cope with after

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of their children,

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as caring, financial and educational challenges.

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, if a couple cannot manage their budget and

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the basic amenities of their future

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, they should

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think and decide about it together. They should think about the peripheral aspects of their decision cooperatively.

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, parents should share their tasks after bringing a

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, because

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are responsible for all peripheral issues of the

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from birth to his or her adulthood.

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, governments should help in

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case. Because, in some countries, just

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have maternity leave for the period of pregnancy and a year after, and there is no

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leave.

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responsible for

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than

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.

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time is difficult and

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for

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, as they should do all the

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lonely. In order to help

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,

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should do their tasks and it is better to have

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leave as well for caring

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newborn baby.

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nurturing the

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impact on their children, so, they should consider

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influence and try to cooperate with each other in bringing their children up. In conclusion, I believe that fatherhood and motherhood should

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equally important.

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are responsible

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deciding to have

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child

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to upbringing and nurturing their

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to adulthood. Governments

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should help in

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case by giving

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leave to

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.