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Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal .some people, however ,think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#government #progress #people #country
Economy
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 is key of standard living and quality of life. economic
growth
is plays
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plays
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vital
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the vital
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role
of
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in
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development
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developing
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country
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countries
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.
Instead
, other aspects are
also
 important for
growth
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the growth
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 of the
country
. There
are
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is
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balance
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a balance
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 of
economy
 and other services provided by
government
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the government
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it
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which
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 would help
to
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wealthy
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the wealthy
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country
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countries
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. I will discuss both points of view and give my personal opinion on
this
 matter. On the one hand ,
economy
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the economy
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 has been playing
most
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the most
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 important
role
for
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in
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country
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the country
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. Economic
growth
 has
been
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decrease
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decreasing
decreased
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 poverty and
increase
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increased
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standard
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the standard
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 of living life .
For example
, In India , poverty is declining gradually because
government
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the government
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 has been focusing on how to
increase
economy
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the economy
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 of
country
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the country
a country
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. They should
as
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possible
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possibly
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 try to give
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higher
high
higer
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higher
 performance for
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the country
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country
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country's
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development
devlopment
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development
 by
economy
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the economy
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, Which might
in
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results
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result
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into
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in
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 poverty decreasing people who would live quality of life.
Furthermore
,
GDP
 is based on
economy
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the economy
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 so,
economy
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economic
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growth
 will
be
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increase
 .
similarly
,
GDP
also
increase
.
GDP
 and
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interest
intrest
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interest
 rates are inversely proportional . When
GDP
 will
increase
the
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apply
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interest
intrest
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interest
 rates go down, for individual beings to consume more which increases,
therefore
, the
GDP
.
On the other hand
 , there are many
way
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ways
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 to
devlopment
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development
 of
country
. Not only economic progress plays
crucial
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a crucial
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role
 but
also
, other aspects like education, health and transportation are equally significant important for
nation's
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a nation's
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 upliftment.
For instance
, Japan had
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an economy
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economy
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economic
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 crisis five decades ago. When
government
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the government
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had
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decided to Invest in child education, Nowadays, Japan is one of the most developed
country
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countries
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 in the world. In conclusion, The financial system plays
important
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an important
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role
 to make a
country
 wealthy. But , other types of progress should be equally important. My opinion is that
government
 should balance
progress
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the progress
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 of the
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development
devlopment
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development
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