Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

It is definitely true that modern youngsters have to endure more stress nowadays
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their foregoers in the past. Since we live in a century of rapid technological development, we should be thankful and grateful
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its opportunities but
on the other hand
, there has been a significant development in offspring’s emotions.
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To begin
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technological advancement.
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is primarily because in the past children were mostly playing outdoor games and the worst punishment for them was staying home all day long.
However
, the situation has changed and now our young ones are addicted to video games and social networks.
Consequently
, they are not leading
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life.
For instance
, one recent study has indicated that emotion that
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from playing video games has dramatically affected children’s mental health.
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, it is eminent that the emotional health of modern young people is worse than
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their ancestors at the same age.
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, it is not a secret that education systems have changed for the worse more than for the better. A program became more saturated and despite it
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more knowledge, it
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emotional tension. Children
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free time, so in many
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they cannot dedicate quality time to their families or to their friends.
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, some students have to pull an all-nighter in order to read up for exams and to have excellent marks.
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sleep and may not even eat during the day. In a nutshell, nowadays lives are totally tense and one of the reasons is the pace of life. A great number of people chasing a dream, get into a kind of competition and forget to rest. Awareness of what you are doing will help you to obtain success but only if you are able to endure significant stress.
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