Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In recent times,
people
are thinking in a different way for their health problems which is why they are going for herbal treatment instead
of going to their common doctor.In this
essay,I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and in my opinion,the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
On the one hand,common medicines
and treatments
are given by certified doctors
.Doctors
are well-trained,which is why they first analyse the disease and then
do a few tests.After that,doctors
are given medicines
and treatments
to patients.In addition
,doctors
are given a proper timetable for when people
will take their medicines
.Additionally
,doctors
observe patients on a regular basis, due to
the fact that people
's recovery ratio is very high.For instance
, in first-world countries, treatments
are very good and recovering ratio is very high.
On the other hand
,alternative medicines
and treatments
are cheap as well as
environmentally friendly.Herbal treatments
avoid major operations,which is why it is very cheap.A growing number of people
,who are scared of major operations mainly want this
kind of alternative medicines
and treatments
.In addition
,poor people
from third-world countries can not afford medicines
and treatments
because in their countries health checkup is not free.Many medicine plants use chemicals which are very harmful to our environment which is why people
are avoiding common medicines
.For example
,chemical plants all over the world are one of the major causes of air pollution.
In conclusion,people
can go for different kinds of alternatives because of low-cost medicines
and avoid major operation issues but in my thinking,I still believe that traditional treatments
and medicines
are very effective and people
should go for common treatments
,which will help them to recover from diseases.Submitted by ashraftaukir on
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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