Many people think children should not be punished at early ages. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment may be applied for children?

Handling
children
is a much-debated topic nowadays,
Firstly
in my certain opinion treating toddlers with care and teaching them a different lesson if they do any mistake
instead
punish them, would be amazing for them or they cannot even lose their confidence in childhood. In the above ,report I attempt to explain my view with the same idea and which steps we take when mistakes are done by our
children
. On the
one
hand,
children
are the empire of their own mind they can do everything which they want without knowing whether it would be dapper for them or not and
this
is the responsibility of parents, look after their
children
, what they are doing and if they
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mobile
then
check the history, which sort of videos seeing by them and what type of games they download.
For example
, I read a report in India
one
younger boy kill his parents due to playing a game
everytime
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on the phone in which all the folks kill each other he is totally involved in
this
game and
this
one
is on his nerves and he
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a knife and kills them.
On the other hand
, there are many other ways to treat
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toddlers at
young
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age
for instance
if they do any kinda mistake not punish them physically only teach them with a unique style and teach them in different ways here I add the example,
last
time in the program there are some child
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naughty cannot obey their parents and teachers their final exams
also
near all teachers are worried about
this
behaviour after that there is
one
wise tutor who teaches them with her some unique qualities she plays with them and on the
ball
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she writes some number she plays in
such
way or she
also
teaches them math included
this
game and all heir in final exam become pass. To conclude,
this
is my strong opinion if we teach our offspring in different ways without punishing them they maintain stunning
remarks
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in every exam or look after their child which sort of things they watch
also
teach them in some unique style.
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