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In future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extant you agree or disagree.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In today’s world, people are shifting towards using the internet rather than using
books
 for
study
. It is often argued that the community would operate their work or
study
 from online platforms in the coming future. In
further
 paragraphs, I will shed some light on the disadvantages of using online platforms for education. To commence with, mankind is migrating to use the net as it is easily accessible everywhere but it
also
 distracts individuals from gaining knowledge. It does not give a feeling of belongingness to their
books
 or any academic work.
As a result
, they get addicted to using phones and do not pay attention to the things which should be on the prior list.
For example
, according to the
study
 conducted by the Central Board of Secondary Education,
it
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was found
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children who
study
from
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online mode feature e-
books
 and youTube gain fewer marks in school compared to those children who
study
books
.
In addition
, I believe that people who use a phone or laptop for their
study
, they have a major impact on their brain as their concentration level goes down because they were unable to pay attention
consequently
 the outcome of their work is not satisfactory and do not get success.
As a result
, mankind would be diverted from its goals.
For instance
, research conducted in the Philippines, it was found that there are 65% of the population who Are having phone addiction reside in rehabilitation centres. To conclude, I am firmly convinced by the view that students should use
books
instead
 of the internet for scrolling information,
Consequently
, they would not get distracted from their own desires.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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