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The presented comparison diagram gives an idea of the
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 of illiteracy in various regions of the globe in the context of genders for a certain period of twenty-two years ago. It is worth noting, that the obvious trends in persistent illiteracy on the African continent and in South Asian
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 are striking. But there are
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 similarities in the proportions inherent in different genders.
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 illustration gives an understanding that developed
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 contain the maximum
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 of educated people. It is interesting to emphasize that literacy among men is always comparatively higher than among women in all regions without exception. One cannot fail to notice the astonishing
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 of lack of basic reading and writing skills among people in Sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab States and South Asia. At the same time, the
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 two of those mentioned show that more than half of the women and around 30%
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 are
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 the named category. It is
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 clear, that at least 10
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 of men and women do not have the proper
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 of knowledge in Latin American
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. It is noticeable against the background of developed
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, that the female
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 of education is much lower than the male
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 in Arab and Eastern
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.
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