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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether raising the cost of
gas
 is crucial. While
this
 idea is valid to some extent, I do not regard myself as an advocate of it and hold a strong view that there is another alternative solution. Without a shadow of a doubt, boosting the price of fuel is not the optimal tactic to solve the environmental problem. Given the fact that inelastic demand for oil is ever-growing as almost all vehicles run on
gas
. People in
this
 day and age have an exorable appetite for going to work and school, so even if the fuel price drastically increases, it makes no difference in reducing
gas
 emissions.
For example
,
although
 the Vietnamese authorities impose higher
gas
 taxes, a wave of people still flock to purchase it to meet their needs.
Hence
, it is not an ideal method with a view to diminishing environmental degradation. While the ineffective impact of the development in the price of gasoline is widely acknowledged, there is a far-reaching solution to address surrounding issues. Since electric vehicles are powered by renewable energy, they seem not to release carbon dioxide, which does not deteriorate the air quality detrimentally.
For instance
, Vinfast, which is an eminent carmaker in Vietnam, has an eco-friendly means of transport.
Therefore
, not only does it satisfy the residents’ desires, but it
also
 has no adverse effects on the environment. In conclusion,
besides
 imposing a criminally expensive levy on
gas
 costs, using greener substitutes can dramatically resolve the alarmingly contaminated surroundings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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