Some people believe that success means earning a lot of money. Others believe that success is defined by personal happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
While there are
people
Use synonyms
who consider personal happiness as
success
Use synonyms
, there are others who think being wealthy is the name of being successful. I personally agree more with the
second
Linking Words
definition of
success
Use synonyms
. In my opinion, wealthy status determines
success
Use synonyms
rather than one’s happiness and there are several reasons why I think so. As far as I’m concerned,
people
Use synonyms
who have high net worth are often considered successful. Since the beginning of history, there has been a social measurement that assesses
people
Use synonyms
by their position in society and how rich they are. And
that is
Linking Words
a natural phenomenon in the human race.
People
Use synonyms
who possess a large amount of money
also
Linking Words
have a great impact on the world.
For example
Linking Words
, individuals like Elon Musk and Bill Gates contribute to global trade and trends.
In addition
Linking Words
, even thinking with common sense, we don’t call a broke happy person successful.
Also
Linking Words
, it has been proven that
people
Use synonyms
can reach
success
Use synonyms
without being happy in the number of researches conducted on successful
people
Use synonyms
(Juan, 2012). It is common that most striving
people
Use synonyms
struggle
Fix the infinitive
to struggle
show examples
with mental health issues. I barely see a prosperous person completely happy with their life.
Moreover
Linking Words
, being too optimistic about life is dangerous in some way and sometimes
being so pulls
Change the verb form
so pulling
show examples
them back from reaching triumph.
However
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
with great personal delight in their lives tend to achieve
success
Use synonyms
,
still
Add a comma
,still
show examples
no matter how much they are happy, society still does not consider them as much
successful
Replace the word
success
show examples
. In conclusion, the term being successful has to do more with earning a lot of money than personal contentment.
Submitted by ET21002ndgroup on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial success
  • Personal happiness
  • Intrinsic measure
  • Contentment
  • Fulfillment
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Harmonious life
  • Career achievements
  • Social recognition
  • Subjective nature
What to do next:
Look at other essays: