Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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, they spend much time on their smartphones in

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life. From my point of

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phenomenon has many negative effects. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined.

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have become addicted to

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entertainments

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on a

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as games, videos, and social

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appeal young generation to be addicted. Another reason is that parents in the modern world are quite busy with their duties, so they do not have time enough to take care of their

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, some parents do not have

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of using mobile. As

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case, I personally think that it brings many drawbacks to

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spent hours on their mobile over

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time, they may have many health problems

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as not enough

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, eyes problem, and slow development.

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can cause

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attention deficit and short memory

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badly academic learning. Apart from that,

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also

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with others in the real world. To sum up, because of many entertainments

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and lacking

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phenomenon which can bring many negative effects to

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like health problems, study

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, and

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