Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

It is apparent that mobile phone has become an indispensable thing for
children
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, they spend much time on their smartphones in
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life. From my point of
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,
this
phenomenon has many negative effects. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined.
To begin
with, why many
children
have become addicted to
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smartphone
.
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One of
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reason
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reasons
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is
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the various
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entertainments
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on a
smartphone
such
as games, videos, and social
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media
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medias
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. They can
be
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appeal young generation to be addicted. Another reason is that parents in the modern world are quite busy with their duties, so they do not have time enough to take care of their
children
.
Moreover
, some parents do not have
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and realize about
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of using mobile. As
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reasons
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case, I personally think that it brings many drawbacks to
children
.
Firstly
, if
children
spent hours on their mobile over
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for
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time, they may have many health problems
such
as not enough
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, eyes problem, and slow development.
Furthermore
, using
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over
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can cause
children
attention deficit and short memory
as a result
badly academic learning. Apart from that,
children
also
have
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with others in the real world. To sum up, because of many entertainments
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smartphone
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and lacking
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care are the reason
of
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this
phenomenon which can bring many negative effects to
children
like health problems, study
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problems
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, and
relationship
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relationships
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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