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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Economic development is considered to be the most crucial goal by many governors, while a group of people believe that other
progress
 should be taken equally into account because they play important roles in developing a country. In my opinion, other aspects,
such
 as educational and environmental
progress
, are as essential as growing the economy. There are many reasons why economic
progress
 is necessary for a country.
Firstly
, economic growth contributes to reducing the unemployment rate by creating more job opportunities.
In other words
, the national budget will receive more money from taxes paid by businesses for the government to invest in infrastructure to tackle its traffic or housing problems.
In addition
 to
this
, economic
progress
 will move in tandem with improving living standards due to an increase in individuals' income.
For example
, a recent survey conducted in Vietnam showed that
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 on account of economic
progress
 after 2008 worldwide inflation, the jobless rate has declined and many Vietnamese have the ability to pay their utility bills as their salary and living conditions have been raised.
However
, I think that if governments only focus on developing their economy without improving other facets, it is likely to pollute the environment because of intensive manufacturing. Producing and trading bring huge profits to every nation, which requires exploiting natural resources to serve it. Lacking policies to protect and regenerate what people harnessed, resources will be soon exhausted which leads to environmental devastation.
Besides
, educational
progress
 is
also
 important since it helps to form and raise individuals' awareness, which not only provides future experts in economic fields but
also
 contributes to coping with global warming in the human aspect.
For instance
, after the industrial revolution emphasising mainly manufacturing, every part of the world have been endured the consequences of climate change accounting for a large number of emissions emitted into the natural environment. In conclusion,
although
 economic development is crucial, I strongly hold my statement that other kinds of
progress
 should be equally improved coincidently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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