In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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parents
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all
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world wish all excellent things and high
opportunity
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to their
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and try to explain that the value could be reached only by hard manner of
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behaviour. There are pros and cons
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this
statement and I am going to discuss them in
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Firstly
,
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is the main positive moment to be hard in
achievement
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anything is the development of resistance to numerous difficulties from a young age. To give a good example, I would remember my colleague who decided to leave the high office position and open his own company (his dream from childhood) because he believed that his
parents
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him
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up
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in the belief that he can pass all problems.
Secondly
, in my view of the
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everyone should understand his or her opportunity for own actions which is possible if the only person has a strong opinion.
On the other hand
, many
youngers
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younger
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could be hard in a boring subject under
parents
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pressure. Often
parents
would like to realize their own dreams from childhood through their children.
For instance
, the son of my friend dreams to be
sportsman
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a sportsman
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but his family try to improve his mathematics knowledge against his choice. ,
Subsequently
,
this
boy suffers because cannot have sport enough and at the same time should be good
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the unloved subject.
Moreover
, there are many sectors where people can be successful not only according to hard-working but with nature skills. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly that there are a lot of negative moments in hard following to some wrong thoughts which could break
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person
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mental health. I believe that advantages overweigh disadvantages and help us to achieve our ideas when we are enough hard.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • work ethic
  • resilience
  • self-confidence
  • self-worth
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • frustration
  • self-esteem
  • pressure
  • anxiety
  • individual effort
  • collaboration
  • social support
  • systemic factors
  • talent
  • opportunity
  • luck
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