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In some cultures, childrens are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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The major
parents
 in
all
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 world wish all excellent things and high
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to their
offsprings
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offspring
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 and try to explain that the value could be reached only by hard manner of
the
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behaviour. There are pros and cons
of
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this
 statement and I am going to discuss them in
this
 essay.
Firstly
,
this
 is the main positive moment to be hard in
achievement
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achieving
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 anything is the development of resistance to numerous difficulties from a young age. To give a good example, I would remember my colleague who decided to leave the high office position and open his own company (his dream from childhood) because he believed that his
parents
 grew
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him
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hm
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him
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up
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in the belief that he can pass all problems.
Secondly
, in my view of the
point
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 everyone should understand his or her opportunity for own actions which is possible if the only person has a strong opinion.
On the other hand
, many
youngers
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younger
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 could be hard in a boring subject under
parents
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parental
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 pressure. Often
parents
 would like to realize their own dreams from childhood through their children.
For instance
, the son of my friend dreams to be
sportsman
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a sportsman
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 but his family try to improve his mathematics knowledge against his choice. ,
Subsequently
,
this
 boy suffers because cannot have sport enough and at the same time should be good
in
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 the unloved subject.
Moreover
, there are many sectors where people can be successful not only according to hard-working but with nature skills. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly that there are a lot of negative moments in hard following to some wrong thoughts which could break
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a person
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person
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person's
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 mental health. I believe that advantages overweigh disadvantages and help us to achieve our ideas when we are enough hard.
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