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Some people feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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The table provides data on the number of new pupils enrolled at Manchester University, the percentage of
students
 by gender and those living from abroad or within 40 miles of the school between 1937 and 2017. Overall, the proportion of international
students
 exhibited an upward trend, whereas the local
students
 showed a decline.
Moreover
, the total figure for freshmen saw a dramatic growth over an 80-year period.

 Numbers of pupils saw the greatest change in enrolment, with 1133 people in 1967 almost four times 327 people in 1937, and it went up significantly to 6254 after 50 years later.
In addition
, the female rate fluctuated throughout the period, which started at 45%, decreasing by 10% over 30 years, before climbing back to 55% in 2017.
Likewise
, the male rate was a rise from 55% to 65% but fell to less than half (45%) at the end of the time. 

It is worth noting that over half
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 came from local areas in 1937, but
this
 percentage hit the bottom to only 1-2% in 2017.
In contrast
, the student rate
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overseas saw a steady rise from 6%
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 4 nations in 1937 to 32%
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 102 countries in 2017.
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