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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less.

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Nowadays sugary
drinks
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 are spread worldwide and the number of
people
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 who are consuming them is rising at a fast pace.
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, there are a plethora of reasons why
people
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 are addicted to sugary
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 on a daily basis
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 consumption of
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 can be reduced. The following essay will
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 elaborate on the reasons and solutions for the aforementioned problem. To commence, the
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 and foremost reason individuals are addicted to soft
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 is that they get attracted to advertisements that promote
soda
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 companies which encourage
people
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 towards it. Especially, the young generation is targeted by marketers by promoting the faces of famous celebrities,
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, many children and young adults follow the ads and drink
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 bottles.
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, humans like to follow the trends which are introduced to society,
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 eating junk food and drinking soft
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 is a
trend
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 nowadays
people
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 follow. As an example, the majority of
soda
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 drink companies are using famous cricket players to promote their ads,
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, a larger number of cricket fans imitate their favourite cricketers.
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, the percentage of
people
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 consuming
soda
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 daily is increasing and
people
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 have made
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 their routine.
On the other hand
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, to limit the habit of compelling sugar-based
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 there are a few steps
people
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 can follow.
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 with, the government should encourage
people
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 that excessive amounts of
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 bring negative consequences to their health
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 as high diabetes and obesity. To do
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, authorities should publish advertisements or posts on social media about the demerits of
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soda
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 pop. Another solution could be, for the government can raise awareness campaigns around the world. As an example, the Sri Lanka youth council runs a healthy body program once a month. To conclude, the habit of drinking sugary
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 can be eliminated by the solutions provided by the government and
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 can bring a positive change to Society.
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