Nowadays social media addiction become trend discuss about causes and effects for this problem?

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In recent years, with improvements in technology , communication ways have changed completely.
people
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now are spending much more time on social
media
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to keep themselves updated,
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, we are facing addiction to social
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which is affecting our health. From a psychological point of view,
people
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suffering from a lack of self-confidence are more active on social
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. In fact, it seems that
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they can hide in the virtual world
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, they have a chance to present themselves with other personalities.
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, a hectic lifestyle needs advanced communication tools as well, in other statements, another reason which makes
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to
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use social
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more is , they can access
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many things at the same time ,
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, checking
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, buying online and hanging out online with a friend, so these are the main merits of
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system.
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, addiction to social
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is
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sophisticated problem. Not only it brings some mental issues like depression but, it
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brings some physical problems
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as obesity.
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, if a person sits most of his time on a chair, he will have some problems which I mentioned before.
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, as we see many
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who are addicted to social
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are avoiding communicating with other
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in the real world.
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these are the bad impact of
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system.
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but not least,
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online systems have brought us lots of good things,
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we cannot deny the negative side of it too. I believe that
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how to use social
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should be taught to the majority of
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, in order to keep them safe from the demerit side of it
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