Some people think that watching sport in leisure time is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that living in

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sufficient

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from their busy schedule and they do not have

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. Whilst , few pupils think that seeing outdoor and indoor activity in free

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is waste of clock . According to my point of

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myraid

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of activity by which people waste their important hours . In the below Paragraph, I would like to

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forth my both view and valid opinion in the conclusion.

To Begin

with , every

children

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love to watch

sports

nowadays and they like to sit

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in front

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in front

of it for hours an hour which is the main

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of watching

sport

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time

. Foremostly , if a person

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too much

sport

then

he or she will get

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the habit

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of the thing and

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will not get focus on their work and it may

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cause fetal death.

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, it may

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get eye blindness .

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, people can

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waste their money on buying silly things

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sport

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sports

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and

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leisure

lesuire

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leisure

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help us to build some

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for our future and we can

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make some hobbies in

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, in the year 2019 whole world has been

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due to CORONA VIRUS and India was the only

one

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country who has used

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time

and made INDIAN Things and supplies whole our the globe.

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we seldom give a thought to

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side of the story ,

Sport

is an activity by which individuals can keep their health and body fit .

In Addition

, watching a

sport

can

also

help human beings to know more about the inside and outside games in which they can take part .

Also

, in

this

contemporary epoch

sport

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give chance to

student

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the student

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to take part in their own choice

game

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and by playing

game

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they can

also

get money .

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, watching

sport

in relaxation

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help

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people to get knowledge about

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different

diffirent

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different

countries and their

sports

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but not the least , by paying

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sport

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and watching

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student

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can get admission

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college. To Cite an Example , India is

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country

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the country

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who offers "

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a student

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student

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students

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who

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good in

sports

and in

different

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a different

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field

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inexorable

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about

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the sport

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can keep on going .

Nevertheless

, showing deep

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reverence

revernce

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reverence

and observing finer

naunce

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nuance

nuances

of the matter mentioned above. I espouse the notion of supporting that watching

sports

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leisure

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leisure

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is not

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it is good for all Mankind.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people think that watching sport in leisure time is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.