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Experts believe that over the next decade, robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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People with studies in specific areas consider that special mechanisms can replace a lot o people in various places of job. In my essay, I will give the pros and cons of that phenomenon based on examples. On one side,
this
 case like the other situations in that world has its own disadvantages.
First
 of all, the abovementioned developments can take away most likely their placement of the job.
For example
, some developing countries have introduced machines which change cashiers depriving them of money for living.
Additionally
,
such
 named robots can roughly break up and sometimes repair it's needed for expensive mechanisms which
leads
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 to extra expenses.
Moreover
, sometimes androids have given errors that it
also
 triggers,
for example
, a lack of goods. On the other side, the aspect has its own advantages,
also
, from the cash side. It is not always the entrepreneur who can allow himself to pay monthly workers, it would be better if he just once a good purchase for techniques. As well as, nowadays are existing all kinds of professions which robotics is unlikely never have mastered.
In addition
, people have to gain a new area of study for seeking good work.
This
 encourages them to apply to universities increasing the level of education in the country. In conclusion, in my opinion, the main theme of the essay has more advantages because progress is an irreversible process.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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