Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?e?

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Wild
animals
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have been around longer than
humans
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, and to some
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even
humans
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were once just wild
animals
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. Suddenly not protecting wild
animals
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is a huge decision, which potentially comes with huge changes to the natural ecosystem so I will be analyzing both sides of the argument thoroughly.
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, shortly after stopping the protection of wild
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, there would be huge changes around the world. Wild animal populations are already in a difficult position, because of human activities, most prominently by lowering their territory through human expansion,
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by cutting down forests. Wild
animals
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also
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play an important part in the overall natural ecosystem of the world, without them wild forests, and plants
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would suffer greatly. There
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would be a large loss in general biodiversity, which is crucial for
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, because we have learned a lot from nature.
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, ceasing the protection of wild
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would free up a lot of human resources which could potentially be used to assist a more relevant cause. It would
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grant
humans
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a large amount of currently non-usable territory, because of wildlife regulations,
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increasing the places we could expand to. Both sides have compelling arguments going for them, but after analyzing both sides,
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benefits of protecting wild
animals
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greatly outweigh the positive aspects of the other side,
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I disagree with the statement.
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