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some people say that advertising is extremely sucssesful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sucssesful #attention
I agree
to
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this
 statement to some
extend
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, living in a country where we can’t speak
with
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our mother tongue can cause serious social
problems
 and
also
 practical
problems
. It can
happens
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 because what makes us feel alive is when we talk to other people. When we have to speak
foreign
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language
, it makes our brain should think numerous
time
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 to let the
word
 out since we’re not speaking our mother tongue. So, we should translate the
word
first
 to the other
language
 and I think it is very exhausting
that
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also
 makes
ourself
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 drained.
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 with foreign
language
also
 means that we have to jokes
with
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 other languages, lucky if we catch the jokes but most of the
times
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 we
wont
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 get the point. In fact, the best way to relieve
ourself
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 is
telling
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 jokes and
makes
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 other people laugh.
Similarly
 with practical
problems
, if we speak
foreign
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language
sometime
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 we don’t know the history of the
word
. Maybe something can happen if we use the
word
 without understanding the context. We can make
native
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natives
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 get angry
from
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 what we said that we’re not intended to do.
Moreover
, if we speak
foreign
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language
 with different intonation perhaps it has
different
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 meaning that we don’t know. And again we can make
native
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 angry
from
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 what we said and end up fighting with them. In conclusion,
speak
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 a foreign
language
 recklessly can cause many
problems
. So if we want to speak
foreign
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a foreign
the foreign
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language
 we should learn them properly or we should just speak our mother tongue and let google translate do the rest.
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