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some people say that advertising is extremely sucssesful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sucssesful #attention
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, living in a country where we can’t speak
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our mother tongue can cause serious social
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 because what makes us feel alive is when we talk to other people. When we have to speak
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, it makes our brain should think numerous
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 and I think it is very exhausting
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 means that we have to jokes
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 other people laugh.
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 with different intonation perhaps it has
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 meaning that we don’t know. And again we can make
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 what we said and end up fighting with them. In conclusion,
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 recklessly can cause many
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 we should learn them properly or we should just speak our mother tongue and let google translate do the rest.
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