Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, smoking in
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public areas is forbidden by
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some
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rules, and a  few workplaces trying to forbid
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smoking in their working places. I completely agree
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view and think that smoking may cause
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some problems which
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harmful
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both environment and
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humans
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life.  
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of all, smokers may cause
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some risky problems for our nature.
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, a myriad number of
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who are smoking cigarettes
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their daily life are causing
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environmental issues like air pollution and toxic gasses which is decaying our ozone atmosphere, and
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of
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process, we are fighting
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some serious environmental troubles. Take an example, in the UK country
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and their environment are suffering from some air pollution and stinky smells which
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made by
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smoking.
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, most
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authorities
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are fighting and prohibiting
to smoke
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in
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public areas in order to reduce the
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of environmental
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of all, most
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medical
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researchers said that a large number of
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are suffering from some disease which was caused by smoking.
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to say,
people
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who are smoking cigarettes, making some
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for
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humans
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life, and even almost
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half of them are dying out as  a consequence of dangerous
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such
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as cancer and lung disease.
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, in Japanese country, smoking is banned because
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their medical research show that
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80% population was stricken,
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of smoking and
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of them was banned
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high
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amount of penalty.
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, some
government
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governments
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are prohibiting
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smoking
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for
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reasons. To conclude, I strongly believe that forbidding  
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smoking can be
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more beneficial rule to prevent
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some problems like environmental and disease which is badly causing to
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humans
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organism.
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