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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace. Do the benefit of this mobility out weight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#information #technology #people #work #workplace #benefit #mobility #weight
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Nowadays
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Nowadays
 many
people
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 allowed to
work
 in
distance
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of
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the
equipments
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equipment
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has
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that has
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 developed. In my point of view, it is
good
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 sign for everyone to
work
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first
 paragraph, I
am totally agree
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 to explain my opinions. On one hand, these few
year
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 during the
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pandemic
epidemic
pademic
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pandemic
, everyone in the world
are
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 suffering from
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different
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different
level
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 of lockdown. Most of the
manufatctories
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manufactories
 closed because the workers could not
work
 from
distance
 and it was hard to continue producing the products automatically with machines.
However
,
people
 who
work
 in the industries of information technology,
they
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can easily find
mutiple
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multiple
 ways to
work
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from
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form
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from
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 home or any other
places
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. In
additional
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, it may still have many
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problems
probloms
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problems
 at
first
,
for example
: the technologist should find a safe way to transfer the secret documents and every company has
also
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the
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internet security because of the
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hackers
haker
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hacker
 and the
boamers
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boomers
boaters
.
On the other hand
, even though there are many risks of working from
distance
, there are still more
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advantages
adventages
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advantages
 than negative points.
For example
,
people
 can
work
 at home and look after their children which can save
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money from babysitting.
Nevertheless
, it can
also
 increase the time with family. In
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conclusion
conclsion
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conclusion
, I believe that the
adventage
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advantage
advantages
 of
work
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 from
distance
 is more than
work
 in
office
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an office
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, it is changing the working environment of
the
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information technology not only because of the process of
equipments
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equipment
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 but
also
people
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because people
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 nowadays want to spend more time with their family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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