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The maintenance of public libraries is a waste of money because of compute technology that has similar functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#maintenance #libraries #waste #money #technology #functions
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In
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 modern era, due to the development of
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, it is easy to maintain a tremendous collection of
books
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 as softcopy, which often lets certain individuals think that the funding
library
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 is unnecessary.
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, I partially agree With
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 statement and I believe that the Internet and computer
technology
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 make the study system a piece of cake, though traditional
libraries
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 have a suitable atmosphere and other advantages. on
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 hand, nowadays it is much more convenient to get and read a book because of the Internet system and computer
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furthermore
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 unlimited
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 can be easily stored and found within a
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 by
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technology
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. not only that but
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 users can read
books
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 from anywhere around the world and it doesn't require much maintenance expenses as a public
library
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.
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, utilizing
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technology
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 could save money which could be used for other purposes like the development of infrastructure, and health systems, or fulfilling the necessity of needy people
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 of using it in a public
library
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.
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,
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 will
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 increase the space for building or other purposes by replacing traditional
libraries
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.
on the other hand
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, public
libraries
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 convey heritage with
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 an atmosphere to gain
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. If people frequently use a computer system, it harms eye sights as well as could break concentration, while the
library
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 surroundings help to be more attentive and do not create any health issues.
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, public
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 amplify the thurst and awareness of
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 which is why it is the symbol of
knowledge
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. In conclusion, public
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 represent the traditional and healthy way to
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 the thirst to gain
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, whereas new
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 provides a new way to maintain
books
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library
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 to save money as well as make it easier for readers with various advantages. In my view, both should be kept and spent money wisely for both sections.
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