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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play ,a concert,or sporting event)is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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People
 have different views about changing and unchanging
habits
. There are various reasons why some
people
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prefer to stay the same and do not want to modify their usual
habits
. And it is
also
 related to
people
 who have passion and enjoy a
change
. I totally agree with the idea that we should have more affection to look forward to new experiences.
On the other hand
, mostly,
people
 prefer to stay the same, since they already have tranquil
life
 and they do not have any reasons to
change
 their usual lifestyle. It is most common in
people
 aged 40 but of course, it only depends on the person. If
people
 regarded
this
 option as the most effervescent for themselves, they would totally support
this
.
For example
, a person has everything in his
life
 and at the same time, he feels happier even with his usual
habits
, there is no way to force them to
change
 their
habits
. They can easily achieve their aims with their ordinary and be delightful all together.
On the other hand
, other
people
 prefer to enjoy
changes
 and do not have any possibilities to regret. Many
people
 consider that ordinary
habits
 might be tedious and every time when you wake up, you feel a sign that you need to open the way to new experiences. What do I mean? I mean, a fledgling habit is gaining new experiences that receive not only
changes
 but it is
also
 merely interesting. Nowadays,
people
, most of their
changes
 upload on Youtube, and spectators, have a passion to watch these types of videos until the end. I agree with
this
 view since it definitely has a lot of benefits and brings a lot of enjoyment and fun to your
life
. To sum up,
people
, who have a desire for
change
, merely have permanent and placid
life
. They do not want to be bothered by not essential things.
On the other hand
,
people
 who have a total desire for new demonstrations and, at the same time, be enjoyed their
changes
. I agree with
this
 point of options since I think in the 21st century it is important to
changes
, that will make us more patient , and stronger and bring a lot of enjoyment
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