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These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

#people #change #jobs #lifetime #trend
The figure illustrates how
sugar
 canes are used to produce
sugar
, and the sequential steps to achieve that.
THe
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first
 step involves the growing of
sugar
 cane plants, which requires between 12 and 18 months. Followed by
the
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harvesting, which can be done either by using trucks and machines or by labourers. Followed by a crushing process to excrete juice from the canes. Moving on
the
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 purifying step, where
limestone
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a limestone
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 filter is used to purify the juice. Nextly, An
evaporator
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 is used to convert the juice into syrup using heat.
Then
, the
centrfugation
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centrifugation
 process comes to separate
sugar
 crystals from syrup, and
finally
 the drying and cooling process to get the final product.
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