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You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the opportunity to shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner describing what you need and asking whether they have these items and what they cost

#friend #opportunity #shop #center #furniture #owner #items #cost
Hello Sir, I hope you doing well. My name is Peter and I just move
in
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this
 city
on
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last
 week. I live in
New
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 Fun Stree area. Here I rented a house as my friend suggest
that
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. Now I want used furniture for my home. I got your reference from one
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your old customer.
Firstly
, I want
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a double
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double size
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double-size
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 bed with
mattress
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a mattress
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.
Also
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 confirm that you have a dining table which must
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me
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 suitable for 8 people as my parents and my family
also
 join me after
few
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a few
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 days. I have a
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television
televison
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television
 which has around
50 inch
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 display size so I need a TV table which should have a space for speakers and
wi-fi
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 router. Kindly, share
price
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 for
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 all things and do not
forgot
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 to add transportation charges if
it
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they
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 will be applicable. More, please share some photographs of that
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furniture
farniture
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furniture
 so I can get some ideas about it. In the
last
, tell me about
payment
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the payment
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 method
that
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 how can I pay your payment as I can do it by only card or online method. I think
that is
 enough for me. I am waiting for you valuable and positive feedback from you. Thank you, Yours Faithfully, Peter
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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