In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think the advantages of moving to cities outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays young
people
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migration from
villages
to urban areas for study or work is increasing. In
this
essay, I am trying to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
phenomenon and
also
the causes. In the beginning, I should say the common reason for
this
issue is that the facilities in the
cities
more than in the
villages
such
as universities, libraries, and big companies.
Therefore
finding a job or developing that because of the opportunity in the
cities
is easier than anywhere else.
Also
for study people have more options to choose a university or a major. In spite of the fact that there are more facilities in the
cities
but there are some drawbacks there,
for example
, stress and hectic life are the reasons urban lifestyle. And moving from village to
cities
cause decries the work power of the village and affects the agriculture system and
therefore
reducing making food for humans. In my opinion, less workforce easily can replace by machines and humans can improve their work or study. I believe that studying or working in the
cities
can improve the life level of the
villages
in the long term because some of the graduating people came back to the suburb and automatically suburban areas can improve after a few years.
However
, I believe that living in the
cities
outweighs the
villages
.
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