Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and expect scientists to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes do you like to see in your new century?

Nowadays, technologies are
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drastically. Like,
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, transportation,
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and so on.
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life becomes easy as compared to the past because at that time there were
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such
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of facilities available so till
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century
new changes
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also
be limited.
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, in the 21st
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there are so many positive researches are made.
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, before
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century
there was no high-speed
internet
available but
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today we reached
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7G
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credit goes to our
scientists
. Even we can not imagine
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without
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. In my opinion, I believe that today's revolution of technologies
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only possible by
scientists
. Because they are doing so
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research on how can be better
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our past.
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, Today many companies like
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NASA and Space X are finding a way easy and budgetary way to reach
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the moon and the marsh. On my point of view,
scientists
should bring changes in many
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such
as
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high-speed transportation methods, the digitalization of payment
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, cyber security, and much more.
Furthermore
, recently some experiments are going on that how can vehicle will run on
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of the Hydrogen fuel. If
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in
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time
then
carbon emissions will be reduced by 60 to 70%. To summarise, we definitely
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that the contribution of
scientists
in
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century
is very huge and they can be a revolutionary change for the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Breakthroughs
  • Incurable diseases
  • Rapid development
  • Vaccines
  • Technological advancements
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Cautious optimism
  • Ethical issues
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Renewable energy
  • Climate change
  • Collaboration
  • Global issues
  • Wealth disparity
  • Innovative
  • Economic policies
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