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Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and expect scientists to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes do you like to see in your new century?

#people #st #century #scientists #changes #world #optimism
Nowadays, technologies are
rise
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 drastically. Like,
smart-phone
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, transportation,
internet
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 and so on.
As a
result
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 life becomes easy as compared to the past because at that time there were
not
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such
type
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 of facilities available so till
20th
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century
 new changes
were
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also
 be limited.
However
, in the 21st
century
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 there are so many positive researches are made.
For example
, before
21st
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century
 there was no high-speed
internet
 available but
on the other hand
 today we reached
at
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7G
internet
 speed.
These all
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 credit goes to our
scientists
. Even we can not imagine
our self
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ourselves
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 without
internet
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the internet
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. In my opinion, I believe that today's revolution of technologies
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 only possible by
scientists
. Because they are doing so
many
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 research on how can be better
from
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 our past.
For instance
, Today many companies like
,
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 NASA and Space X are finding a way easy and budgetary way to reach
on
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the moon and the marsh. On my point of view,
scientists
 should bring changes in many
field
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such
 as
,
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 high-speed transportation methods, the digitalization of payment
method
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, cyber security, and much more.
Furthermore
, recently some experiments are going on that how can vehicle will run on
use
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 of the Hydrogen fuel. If
this
 will be
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success
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 in
few
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time
then
 carbon emissions will be reduced by 60 to 70%. To summarise, we definitely
says
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 that the contribution of
scientists
 in
21st
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century
 is very huge and they can be a revolutionary change for the world.
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  • Incurable diseases
  • Rapid development
  • Vaccines
  • Technological advancements
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Cautious optimism
  • Ethical issues
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Renewable energy
  • Climate change
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  • Wealth disparity
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