Some people believe that the while family (grandparents, uncles and aunt) bringing up children is better than only parents. What is your opinion?

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society considers that all family

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, grandparents, uncles and aunts are responsible for the formation of children's

personality

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personalities

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. I strongly agree with the idea that other family

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should support the parents with

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part of life.

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essay will support my arguments in detail with relevant examples. It is true that raising offspring is not an easy task and only parents can handle

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a difficult task.

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, father and mothers always

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to prefer bringing up

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son alone.

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, mothers in foreign countries do not allow their daughters to visit their cousins until they reach a certain age. Because they think that it will affect them externally and they need to become good citizens tomorrow.

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, others do not agree with

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, in their opinion, all dynasty

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play an important role in the child's growth.

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, young

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generations

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can tell their grandmother or aunt what they could not tell their parents.

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, nowadays both father and mother are busy with office work and pay less attention to the kid.

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, they start to feel alone. In

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take care of them.

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the relationship will get stronger as well. In conclusion, I think both parties are responsible for educating the younger. Because

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are

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, I would like to suggest

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up a child with their blood rapports as he will turn into a good citizen of tomorrow.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Some people believe that the while family (grandparents, uncles and aunt) bringing up children is better than only parents. What is your opinion?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than showing the cultures or artworks from other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Some people believe that the internet has made books and libraries obsolete. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Provide reason and support with examples.