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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disavdantages to living in a house compared with living in an apaartment?

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While some
people
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 prefer to accommodate in a
house
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, others are into living in an
apartment
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. In my opinion plus points of living in a
house
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 outweigh the positive points of living in an
apartment
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. Some prose and cons of both sides are as follows: While
people
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 who live in apartments virtually complain about noisy
neighbours
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, living in a
house
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 gives you more privacy as you do not have to obey some rules
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 as being worried about making noises which annoy your upstairs, downstairs and
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-door
neighbours
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.
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, you do not have to pay for service charges and it makes you either save up money or spend money on your
house
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 according to your desires.
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, living in an
apartment
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 makes safety for accommodations since there are
neighbours
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 and guards in apartments who can tackle thefts.
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, you have more opportunities to get familiar with the kind of
people
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 through your
neighbours
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 because there are many families in an
apartment
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.
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, in spite of fewer possibility of apartments getting attacked by burgles, by setting cameras and firm locks on doors, houses can be preserved from robbers.
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, though there is a chance to get to know lots of
people
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 in an
apartment
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, these days
neighbours
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 are rarely connected or even know each other in comparison to the past. To sum up, owning more privacy and control over the management expenses of a
house
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, the pros of living in a
house
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 outnumber the pros of living in an
apartment
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.
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