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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

#fiction #novels #stories #movies #position
These 2 pie charts
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 information about the result of a questionnaire which asked a hundred visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer in 2005 and 2010. Generally, it is readily apparent that the biggest percentage in 2005 is satisfactory with 45% and in 2010 is good category accounted for 39%. Looking at the details, let’s take a look
first
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excellent
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 rating.
Excellent
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 rating percentage rose sharply from 5% to 28% in 5 years, which is a good thing for the hotel.
Same
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things
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 goes
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good
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rating
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ratings
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 which increase from 5% to 28% in 2010.
In Contrast
,
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a customer
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customer
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customers
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 who
rate
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 satisfactory is dropping dramatically from nearly half to around
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fifth.
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,
poor
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 and very poor
category
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 decrease from 15% and 21% to 12% and 4%
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respectively
resepctively
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. It is worth noticing that from the questionnaire, Parkway Hotel
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 their improvement of quality as
it
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can
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on
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 the raise of
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 and good category and
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 poor and very poor.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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