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The three illustrations show the solar
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panels's
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 mechanism to provide electricity for domestic use. Overall, the
first
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 the parts of the solar
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, and the other two demonstrate the two types of solar
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, namely, solar
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 to heat
air
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 and solar
panels
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 to heat
water
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. Basically, to differentiate between the two types, the solar
panel
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heatingwater
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heating water
 contains a
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 pipe built in it, whereas the other does not. Both
of
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the
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solar
panels
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 consist of a box, inlet, outlet and transparent top. For the solar
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 to heat
air
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, the cool
air
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enter
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 through the inlet, is heated, and is
then
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 discharged as warm
air
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.
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, the solar
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for
tofor
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for
 heating
water
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 works similar way except that pipe connects the inlet and the outlet. When cool
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 goes in, it is heated while it flows in the
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 pipe
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and
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and
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 comes out as warm
water
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