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In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#countries #amounts #foods #people #waste #food #amount
Many countries in the world have problems
about
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 wasting
large
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amount
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 of
food
. In
recently
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 years,
people
 start to think about reducing
the
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waste
 and I positively agree that we have to put more afford
on
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 it. In my point of view,
people
 from developing countries
waste
 more and more
food
compare
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 to past decades. The
economic
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 has grown so fast that
people
 get more income and live
in
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a better life. At the moment,
people
 can choose the
food
 they prefer
instead
 of picking cheaper products.
In addition
, it causes
that
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people
 go to a restaurant and order
the
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meals without thinking too much when they find that it is not
they
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what they
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 want,
the
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food
 is wasted.
However
, according to
the
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public health
concerned
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, we cannot take
those
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food
 to other clients. On the one hand,
people
 go to the supermarket for groceries. They buy
lot
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a lot
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 of
food
includes
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including
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 fruit, vegetables, meat and so on.
On the other hand
, in many small families,
they
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do not need to buy so
many
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food
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foods
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in
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 a time,
therefore
 some of the families prefer to buy less
food
 but go shopping frequently so that they can keep eating fresh
food
. Due to the results of
this
 idea,
people
 living in the same village can
built
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build
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 a community for
food
 sharing to reduce
the
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waste
. Sometimes, in the market, it can only be bought by pairs of
food
 and
people
 who only want to buy one in
this
 case if we have a
food sharing
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food-sharing
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 community, we can buy it together without wasting it
at
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 the end. In conclusion, I believe because
of
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the
economic
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economy
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 of developing countries
has
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increasing
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increased
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 so fast that
people
 changing their
hobbits
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habits
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 for meals and
wastes
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waste
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 too much
food
 in a day.
However
,
people
also
 consider
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about
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it so the
food
 community in a village has started to try to reduce
food
waste
. It is positive to do it because it makes
people
 get closer
with
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 each other and that can make many problems of
food
waste
 be solved at the same time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • excessive
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • storage
  • preservation
  • inefficient
  • cultural
  • incentives
  • reduce
  • awareness
  • education
  • planning
  • organization
  • misinterpretation
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