Teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree?

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has been highlighted over the
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decades. From
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aspect, questions about whether
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should be needed to do unpaid
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in their downtime are raised. In my opinion, unpaid
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for the
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is desirable for
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to some extent. Evidently, the probability that
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could learn sociality from
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activity is high.
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is because
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can experience teamwork and communication skills when they
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undoubtedly
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social skills and
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in turn
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leads them to help
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their career. so that they will be able to find a job they like. What is more,
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some
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works require physical energy, youth can realize the value of
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through
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hard
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. In actual fact, social studies undertaken by experts have revealed that
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are likely to find it difficult to
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while working,
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working leads to careful consumption.
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, even if it is easy
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work
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, unpaid
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is unreasonable.
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, since
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are more likely to experience similar jobs to ordinary workers in
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community
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, unpaid
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reduces interest and the chances of hard
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. To recapitulate,
teenagers
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could learn sociality from
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activity and youth can realize the value of
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through
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hard
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,
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unpaid
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is unreasonable. But
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unpaid
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for the
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is desirable for
teenagers
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • unpaid community work
  • benefit
  • responsibility
  • empathy
  • valuable skills
  • positive impact
  • community
  • social integration
  • cultural understanding
  • personal growth
  • self-confidence
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