At the present time, the popualtion of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays in our
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of young adults bigger compare to the old
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people
peopl
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. So does it good or not ?
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I reckon that has some benefits
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it is the growth of population.
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, so humanity will not die out.
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it is good because
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today the
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needs every day something new
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fore
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example new discoveries, new inventions etc. So
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mean that
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need
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new brains and new thought and
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all
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new thought can help young adults
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because they have another ideology.
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it is bad too that now every year there are fewer and fewer old people.
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because they have already clever and wise. You know that it could be
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fore
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example if USA or UK or France etc. would lead
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who
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30
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the 30
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-40 age group.
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person would not give
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hope
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the citizen
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citizen
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that he would lead the entire country and with
country
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will be everything
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okey
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person who in the age group
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50 to 70 years old give more power of attorney that with
county
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the county
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will be everything
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because he or she has a big experience
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he or she
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than
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a young
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adult. In conclusion of
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in
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our modern
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world
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needs new
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and with it can help young adults but to make
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this thought
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these thoughts
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, projects etc successful help old
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society
sosiaty
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society
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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