Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our enviroment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem?

On
this
day, one of the greatest issues in our environment is Global warming. I cannot argue with
this
statement, because global warming gives a bad impact on our world and the reason why it has happened is because of the overconsumption of fossil
fuels
.
To begin
with, global warming is an issue that happened because the effect of many states cannot control the
use
of fossil
fuels
. Fossil
fuel
is an unrenewable
resource
that has been used by many countries. Most of the country need
this
type of
fuel
for factory and running car. When it is used for those two things it produces pollutants because of the effect of incomplete combustion.
This
substance covers ozone so it makes the heat cannot release into the atmosphere but is reflected again on our earth, and as a ,result the temperature is rising and global warming has happened.
For example
, In
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Russia
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they cannot control the usage of
fuel
and the result is the temperature there that normally below zero degrees Celcius right now is increasing.
As a result
, we can see how overconsumption can lead to global warming. The
next
thing,
this
problem can be solved if many countries have the same mindset to find another
resource
that
such
as electricity and
another
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potential renewable
energy
in their country.
First
, the
use
of electric
cars
has been proven can help to run the
vehicle
. Electricity is used to run the machine inside the
vehicle
and it is not produced any pollution,
moreover
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it has the same horsepower as the old type of car.
However
the cost is the problem with
this
type of
vehicle
, but in the long-term
use
of
this
kind of
vehicle
, it is already proved that it is cheaper than diesel
cars
.
For example
, in
this
day electric
cars
have been produced by the tesla company, and they can run well
such
as diesel
cars
, even though the price is expensive but you don't need to do regular maintenance
such
as changing the oil, so in the long term, it becomes cheaper than the car that using fossil
fuel
.
Secondly
, using potential renewable
energy
such
as wind and heat from the sun. Several countries already
use
this
energy
such
as the Netherlands which used the wind to produce
energy
to run their factory or South Africa which changed from fossil
fuels
to
run
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their factories to the
use
of solar panels. All in all,
i
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believe
this
issue can be solved if we can change the
use
of fossil
fuels
by using another
resource
such
as electricity that has been proven can be used in vehicles, and using another potential renewable
resource
such
as wind or heat that can be used to run on the factory.
Therefore
, if we want to solve
this
biggest threat, we need to start changing the
use
of fossil
fuels
now, so they will not produce any pollutants that can give more harm to our earth.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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