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'Allowing people to 'dress down' in casual clothes at work on certain days of the week encourages people to take their job less seriously. All workers should dress professionally every day of the week.' Do you agree with this view? How do different styles of dress affect how people behave at work?

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Some
people
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 believe that wearing casual clothes at
work
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 on some days of the week discourages
people
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 from taking their job solemnly and they believe all employees should
dress
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 professionally every day. I agree with
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 statement, as professional workers we have to
dress
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 professionally every time we conduct our duties because wearing an unprofessional
dress
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 can have many impacts on many factors related to your
work
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.
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, physical appearance describes a person's personality. Big companies usually have a rule to regulate their employee uniform because the uniform gives a professional impression more than casual clothes. Even though many
people
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 believe that wearing a casual
dress
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 is more comfortable than a formal
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. Wearing casual clothes to attend a meeting with the clients is a disaster, it will be considered disrespectful by the clients
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 it will give bad impressions that can lead the clients to feel upset. It is because
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casual
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 is not proper to wear for attending formal meetings, smart dresses are more proper.
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, wearing professional dresses boost
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's motivation. professional
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such
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 as a jacket and tuxedo costs an arm and a leg. When you wear a professional
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, you must feel proud of yourself because not everyone can have your expensive
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 and your professional job. In
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certain ,condition it can boost your motivation to
work
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 more professionally. The
people
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 who wear a neat
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 to
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 usually
work
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 in a high-paid company which works behind a desk and in a comfortable office. Whereas, low-paid heavy workers usually wear
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a
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casual
dress
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 because their job is on the field and require physical activity. In conclusion, wearing
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apply
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professional
dress
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 can give many benefits for our
work
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.
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, wearing a casual
dress
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 in certain conditions can have negative impacts on your career

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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