Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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people argue that by watching
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kids can study effectively,
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parents should
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motivate
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motivate
their
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children
childern
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children
to watch
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television
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whether
at school or at home,
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disagree with that statement, in my opinion,
TV
is one of the
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biggest
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distractions for
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children
childern
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children
.
To begin
with, it is known that watching television for hours is harmful
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children's
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,
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it will distract students from their studies,
as
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a result, their grades would be affected at school.
For instance
, a
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research
reaserch
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research
by Oxford university conducted on many pupils who watch
TV
regularly and do not in the UK, it was clear that
students
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who do not watch
TV
their grades are better than pupils who watch.
Moreover
,
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guidelines
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need to watch
TV
because it is one
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of
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
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parents can let their
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children
childern
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children
watch
TV
by set some limitations
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how many hours should kids watch television.
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,
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a friend
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of mine was
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watching
waching
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watching
TV
for 6 hours
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, but after his family limited his watching to only one hour, his grades at school completely changed. To conclude, watching
TV
could be
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than helpful for kids, prehabes it would affect their education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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