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Countries with long average working hours are economically more successful than those countries which do not work long hours. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In
this
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 day and age, shortening working
hours
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 is a popular trend in many developed countries. Even still, some claimed that countries, where workers have to work for a longer time, can achieve greater economic success. I personally do not agree with
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 notion,
although
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 understand why working
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 are positively linked to the national economy.
Body paragraph 1
Admittedly, with longer working
hours
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,
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productivity seems to become greater. An extension of working time means more products could be made and more services could be provided on a daily basis.
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, businesses can generate more revenue from their extra output and the overall economic outlook of the whole
country
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 can reap benefit from
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.
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, workers, as human beings, would be most likely to feel tired after overworking.
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, their productivity cannot be guaranteed and in turn, the aforementioned benefit from long working
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 may not be obvious as we thought it would be.
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The primary reason why longer working
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 do not equalize higher economic achievement is that the scientific development of a
country
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 is more relevant to a
country
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's progress. In
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 technological era, exclusive and advancing knowledge of modern physics, chemistry and biology, which can be applied in a practical world, can bring about much more profits than merely increasing working
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.
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, recent research by the US government shows that 90% of revenue from selling an iPhone belongs to Apple company which provides technical guidance and design knowledge.
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, only less than 4% of the revenue belongs to factories that assemble these gadgets,
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 workers in these factories have to work more than 10
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 per day and 6 days per week.
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, it is conclusively clear that long working
hours
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 must be not the most important factor in economic development.
Conclusion
In conclusion, as a high technological level is the most dominant factor for a
country
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 to become wealthy, to claim that a
country
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 with longer working
hours
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 will become more successful is completely ill-founded. It can be predicted that a growing number of countries would apply themselves to boost their technologies as well as reduce domestic working
hours
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 in the future.

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