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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #levels #education #universities #time #facts #skills
The Majority of education
centers
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 conduct the conventional theory-based learning
system
 rather than trying to a balanced
system
 with more practical. I totally agree and will provide relevant evidence to prove
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the opinion of some people who believes that it must be updated into a new
system
 including more practical sessions from the primary to post-graduate levels.
Firstly
, there is no doubt about the proper output of the practical
learnings
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 because most of them
based
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 on the experience in our life from birth. If we consider two groups of science students one group has sufficient laboratory facilities than the other group, the student who
learn
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 with more
practical
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 tests will get higher results in the exam than the other group.
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, the same student who gets a scholarship due to his or her good performance in sports has shown better results
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 exams after entering
to
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the schools generally known as “popular schools” in developing countries which
are
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basically
consists
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with
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certain
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 level of facilities compared to the schools at the
country side
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.
Secondly
, most of the
graduated
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are
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lack
of
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skills
on
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 their practical life.
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, someone
just
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passed-out
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 from a university or a higher education
center
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 cannot do simple things in their home or in the working location even
they
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if they
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 have achieved
the
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 master-level education
such
 as
a
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repairing works of a malfunctioning electrical
system
 in a house by an electrical engineer, a completing some account related applications by
an
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 specialist in the field of accountancy, etc. To conclude,
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a balance
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balance
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learning
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the learning
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system
 with allocating more time
on
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 practical learning techniques
instead
 of more on theory has lots of advantages. It will be more easily learn theoretical concepts and
also
 It may open a new door for innovations as well as help to build
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a completed
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completed
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 person
with
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full of practical knowledge.
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