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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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These days,
people
 have the habit of buying ready-made
foods
 if they do not want to cook something on their own.
However
, I completely disagree that these types of products will replace the traditional way of preparing food. Nowadays, since
people
 have to work for many hours every day , they are not willing to prepare some meals, especially in the evening when they finish working and come back home.
As a result
, they often go to a restaurant with their relatives or friends.
Besides
this
, in case
people
 stay with their family at home, they might purchase convenience
foods
 in a supermarket or grocery shop they usually go to. Indeed, they, certainly, find there a great variety of these products including meat, pasta, vegetable and
also
 fruit.
However
, despite the fact that ready-made
foods
 are spreading around the world , numerous
people
 love to cook meals with
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healthy
healthly
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healthy
 and fresh products . They, admittedly, enjoy watching TV programs where someone teaches them how to prepare new cooking recipes. I personally think that anyone will continue to cook for his
and
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or
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 her if he or she loves good cuisine even though he or she sometimes eats
foods
 which are still ready.
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