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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
A group of
people
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 to take
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life
. we will see both merits and demerits of
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First
 of all, most of the
time
people
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for
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people
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people
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risk
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, during
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 soldiers take
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they
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 can die, but they
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forward
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in front
infront
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,
as a
result
, they win.
Secondly
, due to
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people
 in their daily
life
, they can
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 their confidence level, which
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 to take big initiative in their future
life
 and that's
time
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 unsuccess in their
life
.
For instance
, NASA took
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first
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time
 to reach Moon,
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 a consequence, they discovered Mars.
however
, few public don't know their capability, yet they take
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,
as a
result
, most of the
time
 they are failure sometime, they can lose their
life
. a good illustration of
this
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people
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 types of business without any experience
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they lost their
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also
.
Moreover
, most
of
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the
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people
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them
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different
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result
 they do not get according to their
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.
for example
, in developing and developing countries few
people
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life
, but unfortunately, most of the migrants are
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scrapped
 and die in the sea. in conclusion, it is obvious that without
take
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risk
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risks
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 it is difficult to complete
target
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this
risk
 major or minor. I have discussed both upwards and downwards.
However
, I think
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 outway the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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