Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence.
Experiments
proof
that the features we are born with have more influence on Replace the word
prove
person's
personality and growth rather than any experiences we may gain in our Correct article usage
a person's
life
.I believe the life
episodes which we have gone through are essential
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more essential
on
an individual's character development than the aspects we're born with.
Nowadays,people are obsessed with the current society which control by Change preposition
to
the
technology.Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
,human beings are trying to develop themselves by depend
on their knowledge.Every individual Change the verb form
depending
gain
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gains
their
knowledge through maturity.Undoubtedly,the qualities we are born with do not Correct pronoun usage
apply
effect
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affect
on
someone's evolution.Change preposition
apply
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A human
The human
Human
can be genetically similar to the previous generation's outer looks but,they do not show any similarities Fix the agreement mistake
Humans
of
the thoughts and activities they follow.Change preposition
in
For example
,ancient
times people use letters to communicate.In fact, minor social media platforms but, Change preposition
in ancient
at
the present world most of them are using mobile phones whenever they need to express anything.Change preposition
in
Finally
,the
personal occurrences are Correct article usage
apply
the
supreme role Correct article usage
a
of
everyone's progress than heredity.
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in
Additionally
,the younger generation try
to become more successful by imitating others.Change the verb form
tries
Such
as,
celebrities and leaders of a country.In that case, people change their lives gradually to Remove the comma
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the
modern social habitats.They learn and observe the struggle in the present and try to work Correct article usage
apply
accordingly
. For instance
,the one who use
an android phone Change the verb form
uses
is now tries
to buy an iPhone. Change the verb form
is now trying
Last
but not least, the youngers
do not follow the rituals Correct your spelling
younger
which
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apply
followed
by their elders.They continue their own ways of doing work.
In conclusion,the genes we got at birth and the characteristics we are born with are not important Add a missing verb
are followed
on
one's Change preposition
in
life
's enlargement but, in my opinion,the experiences we may have in our life
be the major influence on our personality and it
make the path to success.Correct pronoun usage
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...