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Life has become much more stressfull compared to our parent’s generation.As a result stress related illnesses are increasing around the world.Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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More and more
people
 find themselves at some point in their
lives
 stressed. There is no doubt that life has become more stressful in the
last
 few years, mostly due to the high expectations society and we put on ourselves to succeed at work and in our private
lives
. In
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stress
 can negatively affect our
lives
 and ways to tackle
this
 issue.
Stress
 more often than not has a negative impact on
people
's
lives
. In our current society
stress
 has become a hot topic, because is linked to a number of mental health illnesses. But why is
stress
 so present in our
lives
 now?
Firstly
, nowadays
people
 are pressured from a young age by their parents and school to decide what they are going to do for the rest of their
lives
, we are pushed to get good grades in school in order to attend college and get a degree so that we can get a job, and so on.
This
 necessity to have everything in place with no room for mistakes creates an unnecessary amount of
stress
 from early on in life. He can make our
lives
 easier if we just listen to ourselves and follow the path we want and not rely so much on other
people
's expectations for us.
Secondly
, now more than ever we define ourselves by what we do, by our jobs, holding ourselves to impossible and unrealistic high standards.
For instance
, we often work extra hours or in toxic environments just to prove ourselves to our bosses, leading to a bad work-life balance. One way to tackle
this
 issue is to stand up for ourselves and prioritize a healthy workplace environment. In conclusion,
stress
 is a prevalent factor in our
lives
 especially because of the high expectations that we and society put on ourselves to succeed in several aspects of our
lives
. To diminish the impact that
this
 has on our
lives
 we should prioritize what we want and look for a good work-life balance.
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