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Some childeren spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays most people spent oodles of their
time
 using their
smartphones
 ,especially heir who use their cell
phones
 for hours each day. Now the question is what reasons effects of using
smartphones
.
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 With the development of technology every ,year
lots
 of useful applications are introduced to the world to respond to the needs of society. Social media applications and video games are the most popular usage of
smartphones
 among teenagers. After the pandemic for 2 or 3 years education have held online so students have to use their
phones
 more langer than before the covid issue. Despite some good benefits of
smartphones
, I think that the
time
 of using them must be limited to avoid
children
 wasting their precious
moment
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moments
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 wondering about in internet with their
phones
, I think using
phones
 can have a very bad effect on social behaviour and
children
 will suffer some
problems
 contacting others in the city and work. The other big issue is lack of movement among
children
 will cause
lots
 of physical
problems
such
 as fatness and spinal core
problems
.
For
example
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 we can see the number of fat students in schools is way more than the number of overweight
children
 compares
in
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 the past, We cannot bypass the good advantages of
smartphones
. Now with a small device in our ,pocket we can do
lots
 of things and cannot do everyone in no
time
. Citizens can read the news and be aware of what is going on or search online to solve their
problems
 in any place. As a
,
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result I can conclude that
smartphones
 are useful appliances with
lots
 of abilities but even if the
time
 of using them does not be controlled and watched by parents,
Children
 may lose
lots
 of their
time
 and suffer major
problems
 in the future.
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