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Computer games is very popular in all ages and nations. Parent think it has little educational Value and more harmful effects. What is your opinion about this? Give example based on your own experience.

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Video
games
 have been a trend ,especially among young
people
 for many years,
people
 from around the globe play these types of
games
 every day alone or with other players that they may or may not know. Parents often believe that the negative effects of
this
 type of entertainment severely outweigh its benefits. In
this
 ,
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 I will present the reasons why I do not fully agree with
this
 position giving examples of why video
games
 can have a positive impact on
people
's lives if used properly. Computer
games
 can have several different themes that range from educational strategy
games
 to violent ones.
This
 is something important to consider when choosing the type of game we expose ourselves and our children to. On the one hand, some
games
 have the potential to teach
people
 new information in an enjoyable way or improve logical reasoning, examples are "How to be a millionaire?" and "Sudoku".
On the other hand
, there are many
games
 that encourage violent behaviours becoming harmful, mostly to the younger generations that are more susceptible to
this
 type of content,
for instance
 when I was in middle school many boys hurt each other during recess by imitating what they played in computer wrestling
games
 at home. In conclusion, computer
games
 have the ability to have very different effects on
people
's lives depending on what they are about. While violent
games
 are likely to encourage dangerous and reckless behaviours, strategic and question
games
 can stimulate reasoning and
consequently
 have educational beneficial value.
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